A Cheesy Love Poem.

[ash_chan]

Yes, yes. I am weak.
I was going through an old school binder when I found a love poem I had written to the guy I like:

It hurts the way it stays inside,

Like a bubble about to burst
Open inside my heart, my
Very soul, but even though
Everyone tells me what to do, to say, to think, I'm still too

Yellow bellied, a coward, too scared to let
Out my most inner feelings and thoughts about me, about you, about
Us, but if you get the picture, I hope you know how much

Of course, I never got to give it to him. I confessed how I felt and I was rejected. Oh well, the past is the past. <3

Anyway, I know it's not all that great, but I thought I'd share it anyway.

[Edit]
Yes, I meant to put 'you' between hope and know. Thank you for catching that. ^^;

[animanic_critic]

It sucks to be rejected, don't it? "Disappointment is a part of growing up", I guess. Well, what're you gonna do... just move forth on life. I was rejected too, but guess poems just never occurred to me :3huh: ...

[Usiel]

When I read this, some thoughts ran through my mind. First i like to say that you do have your way with words, and this is a very unique style of writing when it comes to making something such as this. It made me think, and it made me wonder about the situation.

I am sadden though that he denied you, but oh well. Life goes on and who knows perhaps he may see you as you see him. Anyways again very unique style of writing. Your words seemed precise and taken very serious when you chose what to write. This is of course my own opinion.

Again I believe this is beautiful. I of course am not saying that because I know you but because it is the truth.

[Mana]

And here I was hoping for something really god awful like r0535 R R3d/5ug4r i5 5w337/If U'd b3 m1n3/I'd f33l pr377y 1337. But, honestly, it wasn't half bad.

And at least you had the courage to tell him you loved him :D I never did, especially since mostly they were already friends anyway and I didn't want to ruin things. Ah well.

[Itachi Uchiha]

Us, but if you get the picture, I hope know how much
In that last line... Do you mean - I hope <you> know how much?