My Art Thread

[Ashuri]

This is my art thread, as cleverly noted in the title. I've finally decided to make one so here's my first entry. This is a drawing i did a little bit ago, the scanner messed it up but w/e. tell me what'cha think please

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/06-02-2006090107PM-1.jpg

-Ashuri

[KingVVolf]

I remember you showing me that one b4. And I still say it looks good. I wish I could draw.

[Neo-Hunter]

Really great. nice job.

[Spilled Milk]

thats really awsome If you are going for a more realistic aproach, the eyes and hair could use alittle depth. The nose and Lips look really nice, but the eyes look very 2 dimensional and flat, as does the hair. :) nice job tho.

[Ashuri]

thats really awsome If you are going for a more realistic aproach, the eyes and hair could use alittle depth. The nose and Lips look really nice, but the eyes look very 2 dimensional and flat, as does the hair. :) nice job tho.

:( yeah, the scanner messed up all the shading. i'll work on figuring out a way not to lose depth with the scanner, if you have any tricks up your sleeve, please, feel free to share them. Thanks for the constructive crit. :)

[Ashuri]

New poem, tell me what you think


These streets are whithered without you
Fragile and cold like my heart
Street lights flicker at the silence
Ready to burn out in your absence

These streets will never live again
The presence of color is hidden
Street signs are no longer meaningful
bent and cracked, no readable labels

These streets are old and lonely
dust fills the cracks in their pavement
Rain steals the paint from the surface
No intentions to ever replace it


constructive crit. is welcomed. thanks in advance

-Ashuri

[NausicaaBoy]

You are one very talented lady :love13:
anyway I cant comment on the art (that looks great btw)

sooo..your poem. I really like it, the imagery flows well. While I was reading it though for the second time It really hit me that you could try to add some rythem or rhyme to it. Anyway- amazing work as is. (Waiting for some suggestions on that poem of mine...i think something is missing..)

[Ashuri]

lol, thanks Nausicaa

here's another poem i wrote. needs help


I walk this path alone
Shaded by the weeping trees
protected by its leaves
Thinking of the road outside
walking through the wet grass
morning dew and blades on my feet
All alone, or so i thought
but then i saw you
peeking beyond a shield of bark
peering into my lonely heart

Why are you here, tell me
What do you see in me?

The wind blows, moving leaves
branches shoved aside
leaving the sun in it's place
a dim light caputres your smile
forcing me to smile as well
darkness again, leaves in place
branches where they belong
the dim light is gone
but you still have that grin
and i still have mine

why are you smiling sweetie?
What's so great about this road?

You walk towards me
smile still showing
your eyes take mine captive
i smile back at you
awaiting your answer
but the answer does not come
at least not in the form of words
you take my hand
and with it my attention
this path will be lonely no more

[KingVVolf]

I like it. It's a nice little poem, and makes me kinda happy reading it. I want to c some more!

[NausicaaBoy]

Your most enjoyable work yet. I love that poem...makes me all warm and fuzzy inside!!! I really cant find anything to critiqe.....Love it!!

will ne lonely?

whats that mean

[Ashuri]

ok spilled milk, i worked on eyes, let me know if this is better please? It's on notebook paper if you were wondering, cause i couldn't find any computer paper ^_^;

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/lastscan1.jpg
i hate my scanner

here's another pic i drew this afternoon

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/1111.jpg

[aoi_n_asul]

hey nice drawings! the eyes are better now compared to your last one since you added more depth with the shadows. however, consider the lighting in your drawing, like where does the light strike the eye (above, below..) so that shadows and highlights can be placed appropriately to make it more real.

your second drawing is nice. i like the way you did the hair and the nose (nice shades) but the chin is kind of off. it should be aligned with her mouth. use foreshortening to create the face's angle and direction.

good job!

[Ashuri]

your second drawing is nice. i like the way you did the hair and the nose (nice shades) but the chin is kind of off. it should be aligned with her mouth. use foreshortening to create the face's angle and direction.

good job!

I knew something was off down there! thanks :)

[Sakito]

thats really awsome If you are going for a more realistic aproach, the eyes and hair could use alittle depth. The nose and Lips look really nice, but the eyes look very 2 dimensional and flat, as does the hair. :) nice job tho.
Its been a while since I have posted any were and I agree with SM on this one, the drawing is great your off to a great start with your art thread and a side not what the hell took so long your great at what you do dont be asshamed to show your tallent. Back to the drawing the face looks a little off set to me but that may be because of your scanner who knows, but other than that every things very nice here. Ill comment on your poems and other work later Peace.



~Sakito~

[Tori]

nice drawings

[Ashuri]

nice drawings
Thanks Tori ^_^

Its been a while since I have posted any were and I agree with SM on this one, the drawing is great your off to a great start with your art thread and a side not what the hell took so long your great at what you do dont be asshamed to show your tallent.Back to the drawing the face looks a little off set to me but that may be because of your scanner who knows, but other than that every things very nice here. Ill comment on your poems and other work later Peace.

~Sakito~
Thanks Sakito. Where have you been? We've missed you around here ;) yeah my scanner has ways of making everything look like crap. I take creadit for messin up the chin though, that was all me ^_^; I fixed it on paper, but i'm afraid to scan it again *glares at scanner*

Ok, more drawings
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/06sd-29-1.jpg
errg
OoOo, digital art, haven't seen any of that yet have you? Working on colorizing, no idea why the colorized one is so much bigger, but w/e, enjoy.
(original)
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/coloriseblack.jpg
(colorized)
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/colo2.jpg
Her teeth look horendous, but i couldn't figure out how to make them whiter. I tried the dodge tool, but it just made it a brighter yellow, i tried going over it with a light airbrush, but it looked really weird. If anyone has any tricks to get her teeth whiter, please, share them. I need all the help i can get. This this weird line around the lips i couldn't seem to make dissappear also...hmmm

I know, really long post, but i'm leaving for michigan tomorrow and won't be able to get back on here until tuesday. I await your comments ^_^

-Ashuri

[aoi_n_asul]

you have a way with shadows and details, and it's really good. the brows look really realistic, and the highlights reminded me of sharingans ^^ yeah, that part does not sit well with me, since i have not seen highlights done that way, but they look good still. digital art, i am not that well acquainted with it, so i find it really nicely done. yellow teeth are stronger than white teeth, though =^^=v

[kiyone]

I have a couple of suggestions for her teeth.
Step 1) Make a path around her teeth, and create a new layer with only her teeth.

Step 2) Use the curves tool to adjust the color of her teeth. OR On the layer with only her teeth use the color fill tool, and pick a cleaner/whiter color. Then on that same color fill layer select color on the pull down menu.

You can probrably clone the lines around her lip out using the stamp tool of course. Hope this helps a little.

[Ashuri]

thanks guys. I'll try those suggestions Kiyone ^_^

[Ashuri]

mmk, so wrote some lyrics.....yup. *hums tune* yeah, it's kinda depressing, one of my friends even described it as emo....even though if you read it it's actually sort of anti-emo, i donno. If you have any suggestions to make the lyrics better let me know, thanks. Sorry for depressing tone in advance.

For our Moments of Weakness

Verse 1
everything is so messed up
I'm just trying to think of
a way to escape this pain
without spilling blood from my vein

nothing has value any more
i'm just trying to win this war
i need a way to escape this suffering
without completely surrendering

Chorus
and sonetimes,
there's no where else to turn
and sometimes,
there's nothing left to burn
and sometimes,
there's no one to lean on
and sometimes,
you feel the opposite of strong
This is for (this is for) all our moments of weakness
all the moments in our worst interest

Verse 2
and everythings falling apart now
and theres nothing left to think about
i need a way out of this punishment
without creating wounds to mend

and nothing is honest anymore
all our lies have taken the floor
i need to leave this fake trust behind
without commiting suicide

Chorus

Bridge
everythings changing
and nothing makes sense
I'm losing myself
and getting more tense
and sometimes, just sometimes
there's no one to lean on
and sometimes, just sometimes
I feel the oposite of strong

Chorus

(music break)

This is for, all our moments of weakness
all the moments in our worst interest

[Ashuri]

ok so i drew this a while ago and found it, corrected some things i spotted, and now i'm posting it. let me know what you think. Btw, only the pencil side is drawn, it was a project in art to complete the picture. Yet again my scanner suck, so bare with me

Captain Jack Sparrow

http://img207.imageshack.us/img207/7104/donejohnny8dh.jpg

-Ashuri

[animanic_critic]

Wow, I gotta say I'm pretty impressed...:jawdrop: !

[Ashuri]

A Friendship Wasted

So close and yet you drift away
as its been said, there's nothing left to say
it feels like i'm finally losing you
and there's nothing left for me to do
but watch you turn your back on me
watch you abandon, watch you leave

So walk away and try to pretend
that you didn't know how it would end
the secret that cost us our friendship
its all just a worthless piece of sh*t
and nothing you say can stop this
so just shut your mouth for a bit

So your lack of words is killing me
you silence shatters my very being
all those years of hurting and healing
have suddenly lost all their meaning
and i all i can do is wish you well
goodbye for now and good luck in hell


--Ashuri

[animanic_critic]

A Friendship Wasted

So close and yet you drift away
as its been said, there's nothing left to say
it feels like i'm finally losing you
and there's nothing left for me to do
but watch you turn your back on me
watch you abandon, watch you leave

So walk away and try to pretend
that you didn't know how it would end
the secret that cost us our friendship
its all just a worthless piece of sh*t
and nothing you say can stop this
so just shut your mouth for a bit

So your lack of words is killing me
you silence shatters my very being
all those years of hurting and healing
have suddenly lost all their meaning
and i all i can do is wish you well
goodbye for now and good luck in hell


--Ashuri
Oh, sounds more like "A Courtship/Relationship Wasted" rather than "A Friendship Wasted", 'coxz it sounds like you were cheated behind your back or somethin'...

[Smitty]

I'm totally loving the Jack Sparrow picture - he is so hard to draw (I've tried to do it myself, it's tough) and you did a fabulous job. I think if you pulled down the darker values a little more it would really make it pop.

I'm not much of a poet or lyricist so I can't really give you any advice on the poetry, but I like it! Very expressive. Nice work!

[Ashuri]

Thanks for all the advice and tips. Anamanic critic, i can see how it could be misinterpreted as that, but i intend to keep my original title.

got bored so i decided to take a stab at stil lifes....Ok this is a flower made out of metal , so it's not supposed to look like a real flower. I discovered i can't draw continuous circles to save my life. Geez, my scanner sucks. I kow i'm being random, let me know what you guys think please

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/000000drawingstillife.jpg

-Ashuri

[Neo-Hunter]

hey ashuri, Great job on the drawing I really like the colorized one, It's been a while since i posted anything about your thread and I'm really sorry i gotten Busy at work and come home crashed. I also liked your poems, It shows your inner struggles and feelings that come and go.

~CAP.N hunter

[aoi_n_asul]

it's a nice still life. i especially like the details on the leaves. ^^

[animanic_critic]

The shading is very good, but I have something to ask: Are the leaves made out of sheet metal? It's just that if they are, then you've hit the bull's eye on it. The stalk also looks like it's been galvanized... as technical as it sounds.

[Nicotine]

Her teeth look horendous, but i couldn't figure out how to make them whiter. I tried the dodge tool, but it just made it a brighter yellow, i tried going over it with a light airbrush, but it looked really weird. If anyone has any tricks to get her teeth whiter, please, share them. I need all the help i can get. This this weird line around the lips i couldn't seem to make dissappear also...hmmm

I know, really long post, but i'm leaving for michigan tomorrow and won't be able to get back on here until tuesday. I await your comments ^_^

-Ashuri

You could sponge tool it...here. I did it:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v160/Lucca027/colo2.jpg

Or...even whiter?:
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v160/Lucca027/colo3.jpg

Put the opacity on full and make sure your desaturating. :D

[Ashuri]

Thanks for the feedback guys, and thanks for helping me with my colorize project Nicotine. The program i was using doesn't have the sponge tool or any tool that does its job. Thanks. Yes, Animanic, the leaves are made out of sheet metal, so thank you ^_^. Hope to have another drawing or poem up here soon.

[Ashuri]

ok i finally finished this

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/0drawing-1.jpg

[bwing55543]

This is my art thread, as cleverly noted in the title. I've finally decided to make one so here's my first entry. This is a drawing i did a little bit ago, the scanner messed it up but w/e. tell me what'cha think please

http://myspace-357.vo.llnwd.net/00792/75/33/792023357_l.jpg

-Ashuri

Your pic isn't showing up.

[bwing55543]

Thanks Tori ^_^


Thanks Sakito. Where have you been? We've missed you around here ;) yeah my scanner has ways of making everything look like crap. I take creadit for messin up the chin though, that was all me ^_^; I fixed it on paper, but i'm afraid to scan it again *glares at scanner*

Ok, more drawings
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/06sd-29-1.jpg
errg
OoOo, digital art, haven't seen any of that yet have you? Working on colorizing, no idea why the colorized one is so much bigger, but w/e, enjoy.
(original)
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/coloriseblack.jpg
(colorized)
http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/colo2.jpg
Her teeth look horendous, but i couldn't figure out how to make them whiter. I tried the dodge tool, but it just made it a brighter yellow, i tried going over it with a light airbrush, but it looked really weird. If anyone has any tricks to get her teeth whiter, please, share them. I need all the help i can get. This this weird line around the lips i couldn't seem to make dissappear also...hmmm

I know, really long post, but i'm leaving for michigan tomorrow and won't be able to get back on here until tuesday. I await your comments ^_^

-Ashuri


That's a good face.

[Ashuri]

Your pic isn't showing up.

Thanks i'll fix it right away

[animanic_critic]

ok i finally finished this

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/0drawing-1.jpg

The sketching and shading are just fine, but I have to comment on something: Perhaps it's just a perspective issue, but the poser's back looks a little asymmetrical because it looks like she's declined towards her left shoulder (I hope you're following me on this).

Other than this, commendable work~!

[Ashuri]

The sketching and shading are just fine, but I have to comment on something: Perhaps it's just a perspective issue, but the poser's back looks a little asymmetrical because it looks like she's declined towards her left shoulder (I hope you're following me on this).

Other than this, commendable work~!

the angle is from overhead and she is turned to her left a little bit so the left shoulder is closer to the point of perspective than the right, so i made the right shoulder a little bit smaller because its farther away and she is looking down so that's another reason. i hope that makes sense. If i completely missed what you were talking aboutlet me know, but i think i got it lol, hope that helps

[animanic_critic]

Okay I follow you, perhaps just my point of view. Nice work anyways :smash: !

[Ashuri]

Okay I follow you, perhaps just my point of view. Nice work anyways :smash: !

haha, thanks, sorry for the confusion

[Smitty]

I love the latest piece, it's so elegant and calm. The attention you paid to detail in the hair is absolutely fantastic (especially the subtle lighting on her bun). I would suggest using fewer lines and more shading and make the existing tones darker, especially on her shoulders and neck - it will make things look a lot more natural. Also, the ear looks like it's been glued to her head :p. But now I'm nitpicking. This piece is lovely. Good work!

[animanic_critic]

Also, the ear looks like it's been glued to her head :p.
Ah! Now that I scrutinize it closer, the ear does look like it's curved inwards into the back of the head. I don't know whether it's one of the person's natural traits, but it look a little unnatural.

I didn't notice it earlier until Smitty mentioned it.

[aoi_n_asul]

nice work ashuri! ^^ yeah, the ear looks weird. your shading is really great. i'm just a bit bothered with her shoulder blades (unless those aren't her shoulder blades ^^) they don't connect all the way to the shoulders. they are usually presented as triangular elevations in most drawings that i've seen. still, beautiful work. :thewave:

[bwing55543]

This is my art thread, as cleverly noted in the title. I've finally decided to make one so here's my first entry. This is a drawing i did a little bit ago, the scanner messed it up but w/e. tell me what'cha think please

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/06-02-2006090107PM-1.jpg

-Ashuri


That's nice! I'm good with shading on the computer, but I'm a sad case with pencil shading. If you check my thread "My E-manga," you'll know what I mean.

[Ashuri]

Ok thanks to everyone that commented on my drawing, I know the ear looks funny and it all looks weird on here, but on the paper it doesn't look so bad, my scanners just a piece of crap. Those are her shoulder blades, i had no picture to look at so i improvised lol. Thanks again adn i'll fix things you all suggested ^_^

here's a wallpaper i made for the movie, The Black Dahlia

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/theblackdahlia.jpg

its a horror/murder mystery film, so i tried to make it look grungie and erie a little bit. Let me know wat you think

[aoi_n_asul]

that's one cool wallpaper there. the lips and the black swirls are perfectly eerie. it makes me wanna go out and watch it :batman:

[clonedtheory]

I WANNA POST MY DRAWINGS TOO,CAN YOU PLEASEx3 TEACH ME HOW TO PUT MY DRAWINGS ON THIS FORUM

[animanic_critic]

Uhh...

Ashuri created this thread in order to post her artwork and seek opinions for them, plus some poems here and there. I don't know whether she would like to see others' work here, so I'll leave it to her.

I suggest that you create your own thread solely for displaying your artwork. Since you're still new, you won't be able to showcase or link them directly. Just paste the exact URLs in your posts to link us to your art pieces. I would love to see them myself.

...oh, and please tone down on the bolding and rendering your posts upper-case, since it's pretty difficult to read them, just like how Roark put it ;)

[Ashuri]

nicely said animanic critic. Thanks. i decided i hate that line on my wallpaper, so i'm re-doing it, in the mean time, heres a drawing i did. i decided to try colored pencils.

http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y232/LuckiiStar07/00lastscaneye.jpg

[aoi_n_asul]

it's alive!

that's one realistic drawing there Ashuri! for a while, i thought it was a real eye there. ^^ the shadows on her eyelid and the kohl (i'm assuming this one) makes the eye 3d-esque. nice job!